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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and explain from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent years, a growing number of
people
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 have decided to
travel
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 by train.
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 a practice has aroused the attention of the public and
people
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 have mixed views on
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 issue. Some believe the developed train
system
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 enables residents to
travel
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 at low costs whereas others argue that building of
railway
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system
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 requires a tremendous amount of money. Personally, I prefer the train
system
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 to highways for the following reasons.
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 of all,
people
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 can transport goods and products via the
railway
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system
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 in a timely manner. The designated routes for
trains
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 make sure there is no obstacle to obstruct them when it is operating.
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,
trains
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 can carry more products than many other transport means,
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 as trucks, mini-van, etc. As indicated by the study of Nanjing University,
trains
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 provide immense flexibility for goods transporting as they can
travel
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 2 times faster than private cars without compromising their safety. As a consequence, many businesses are much more rely on the
railway
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 than on roads. Aside from that, the
railway
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system
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 is
also
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 an important transport connecting the regional areas and metropolitans. The accessibility of
trains
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 enables
people
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 living in different areas to
travel
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 at ease. The survey conducted by Havard University reveals that the development of the
railway
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system
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facilitate
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 the cultural exchanges within and
beyong
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beyond
 a nation. The population flow
that is
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 brought by the
railway
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system
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 not only
increase
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increases
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 regional communication, but
also
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 the local economic growth.
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, there
is
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 strong bonds between regions been built up.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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