In recent years, young people in many countries choose to live by themselves. What are the reasons and is it a positive or negative development?

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in most countries used to live alone and be independent. In my ,opinion I totally agree with the young generation. because they would learn to stand on their own feet and become responsible for themselves.
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being with family is easier and maybe
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cheaper for young people , but it would make them more dependent on their families and their parents. In
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prefer to have their own home and they would learn
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responsibility in real life
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they could have their own partner. in the fact
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they will be ready to make a new family.
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living alone could have some disadvantages,
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as being far from family and may affect the person with the wrong guys, and go the wrong way.
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they wouldn't have any guide and it could be a negative point for some young
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. they would find some trouble like
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some financial problems too. but these are not enough reasons to keep the young society
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with family. so they could follow their own lifestyle and enjoy whatever they like. It is obvious that living with themselves for the young generation is necessary in order to become a strong man or woman in the future .
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I believe that the persons who want to be
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stronger in future must live alone and
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independent from their parents as soon as possible.
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