Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is believed by some people that
children
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who are in the field of allowance to get their own choices on three basic needs (
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and
entertainment)
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to be the best result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes while for some people,making decisions about these matters depending on their
parents
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is very important for
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children
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. On the one hand,
children
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who have been allowed to decide their
mind
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will eventually
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keen sense of
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responsibility
resposibility
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responsibility
and positive qualities.
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,
children
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who choose to
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indulge
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may become overweight and be laughed at by their partners.After that,they learn the importance of choosing healthy and suitable situations.
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,I still accept that
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should make the majority of choices so that
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will be more responsible
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towards
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towards
others.They have
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completely over them with some forces ,not with struggling stress.
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,some
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have made the logical and ethical choice to be vegetarians and they force their
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to do the same.
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can have a positive effect not only on their individual health but
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on the environment.And
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,
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should have some
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to keep them up with the trend
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times. In conclusion,
parents
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should make decisions for
children
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to guide them with the ability to live in harmony.They should work with teachers in their efforts to raise their qualities for future generations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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