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Do you think extra-curricular activities are important in a student’s life?” Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Dear Mr Smith, I am writing
this
 letter to request leave because of the special circumstances and to suggest a replacement during my absence. I am working in the customer service department of the company. I have been struggling with back problems for three years and recently, it has become worse. I visited the doctor
last
 week,
after
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and after
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 multiple scans and tests, he suggested
me
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I
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to
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apply
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undergo an operation which requires three weeks to recover. If possible, I would like to apply for a leave
of
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for
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month
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a month
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. With regards to the assigned work, I must take one week to rest before the doctor performs the surgery, so that will provide me with enough time to enter all the customer details.
Moreover
, I will forward the completed work to the team leader before the end of
next
 week.
Finally
, I discussed my situation with Rohan, and he is willing to cover all my duties while I am away.
Furthermore
, he has 4 years of experience in
customer
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 service department so I can assure you that there will be no impact on the work during my absence. Thank you again for your attention to
this
 matter. Yours sincerely, Sai Surapaneni.
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