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Nowadays tourism generates a significant portion of national income for many countries, but it has certain drawbacks too. This essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and provide a logical conclusion

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The
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 sector is contributing immensely to the
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's economy
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while considering the ecosystem it has some disadvantages too.
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 tourists can experience mother nature very closely, the existence of natural
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and a beautiful environment can be in danger.In my ,opinion
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 should be encouraged because it helps in building the nation's GDP and
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 the tourists can get awareness about that particular destination.
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 of all,The main benefit of the touristry sector is It can contribute a high percentage economically to the agrarian.
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, it helps in higher employment generation.
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, it contributes
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 an increase in foreign currency reserves.
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,it can boost the
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's development process.Because ,when the inflow of tourists is high. ,
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Eventually
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 the foreign currency reserves will be increased.
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, in The
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 called the Maldives,the
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's economy is purely
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tourism driven
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.
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,The major drawback is the natural
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, and vulnerable monuments and pilgrimages will be at high risk.Because the monuments which were built very long back ago they will be in so vulnerable condition.
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 we need to protect them it is our responsibility.On top of that, wastage
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 as plastic thrown by the visitor intentionally or unintentionally
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can cause harm to the animals .
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 it can affect the order of the ecological system.
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, in Goa the state of India ,The beaches were getting polluted because of the decay spilt by the visitors. In conclusion, In order to boost the
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economy the countries encourage
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.
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 it has benefits in exchanging foreign currency while the natural
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 and ecological system getting exploited.I believe that let the
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 sector flourished but
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 should not allow visitors to exploit the natural
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