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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teacher be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children,

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It is argued that the youngster must learn about various correct and incorrect behaviour since they are
children
 by means of
punishment
. I strongly believe that consequences are significant to
instill
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 great
moral
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morale
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 and make them think before acting. The
parents
 and the teacher can punish the pupils with
the
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mild
punishment
.
To begin
 with, I agree that
the
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punishment
 can provide
the
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 deterrent effect for students to do awful actions. In
this
 case, they might behave badly because of some bad associations
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 their school. When they study at school, they tend to behave arbitrarily because they are not directly supervised by their
parents
.
For example
, male students who bully classmates who have a diverse range of skin colour have no respect for other people and they just do whatever they want.
Secondly
, most
children
 in each family are accustomed to stealing
money
 from their
parents
' pockets. It will keep happening if the
parents
 do not punish their
children
.
Therefore
, the
children
 do not know the consequences of stealing other people's
money
.
On the other hand
, the
parents
 and
teacher
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teachers
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 should give light
punishment
 without physical touch.
For instance
, If a teenager steals
money
 from his
parents
,
then
 the
parents
 can punish their
children
 directly by giving advice and reducing
the
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 pocket
money
.
As a result
, they can understand what they are doing if they act in terrible manners.
However
,
for example
, if a student is violently treated because of the colour of his skin, the teacher can punish the perpetrator by asking him to stand in front of the class and tell
his
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 poor actions to their
parents
.
Consequently
, it will make them feel embarrassed to commit
such
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act
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 again in the future. To sum up, I think that
parents
 and teachers should be required to educate
children
 about the consequences of nasty
attitude
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attitudes
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since
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 childhood by using
punishment
.
Nevertheless
, I believe that only mild
punishment
 without physical touch is appropriate for them.
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