Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational; otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree?

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been
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evolved in the
last
fifty years, from bullock carts to
bicycles
to cars and buses. During
this
period,
usage
of
bicycles
is minimised despite the health benefits.In
this
essay, I will look
firstly
at the reasons and
then
highlight how to encourage
bicycles
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usage
with appropriate examples. To start with, in most countries urban roads remain the same and it is almost congested with private and public vehicles,
therefore
no space for
bicycle
riders,
also
putting
cyclist
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at risk.Recently road and safety
NGO
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released statistics on accidents highlighting cyclist is the most vulnerable to hit and run cases.The other reason,per-capita income has increased,influencing laymen for choosing two or
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four wheelers
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instead
of a
bicycle
. Nowadays, having two or
four wheelers
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is acting as a status symbol,neglecting
health
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benefits
by
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using
bicycles
. To increase the
usage
of
bicycle
,
first
,separate cycle lane
need
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to create which is well connected with the city centres and other important places with the shortest route, away from the main roads.
This
will give immense security to cyclists.
Second
,a government initiative is needed where buyers can purchase
bicycles
on
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the subsidised rate along with the tax relief.
Third
, health policies should be interlinked with the
usage
of
the
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pedal bikes.
For example
, leading insurance organisation comes with
the
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incentive plans, wherein users can get loyalty points for every kilometre ride by
the
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bicycle
but pedal bikes should have a GPS tracker.Fourth, the government should increase taxes on buying
the
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motorcycles or cars.
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, in Denmark, heavy taxes on
the
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vehicles
which
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discourage buyers,
as a
result
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the preferred mode of commuting through pedal bikes,
the
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highest in the world. In conclusion, stating the reasons followed by the ways to increase
the
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bicycle
usage
, people have to understand the benefits and the consequences of
sedentary
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a sedentary
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lifestyle.
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