Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening.

Some people argue whether or not being monitored is an art of safety or simply an invasion of privacy. I personally believe that the more

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devices there

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, the more the world will lose

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natural beauty including people’s limitations to their own will. The

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objection is that we are completely being watched by the authorities. For

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it could be a chance for reducing criminalism and a simple form of state control, whereas for me it is a basic manipulation.

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are the most controlling sources, yet everyone uses them daily. Platforms like Facebook, Instagram, Snapchat, Twitter and even more are constantly listening to users’ conversations

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showing them their interests and gaining data on people’s opinions, behaviour and choices.

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follow and save all of the searched information online, as

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way they could find out their characters, even using that knowledge

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personal privacy. Another example

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all of the CCTV cameras placed in private rooms

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as changing rooms and toilets. Imagine a customer of a shop getting undressed,

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someone’s watching them at the other end of the screen.

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knows what kind of morale people have that are holding all of the power of these devices. To conclude, even if there are advantages of using monitors on daily basis,

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as making cities safer for

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inhabitants

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many citizens might suffer in the future to

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proliferation of “safety devices”. The consequences might be

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we have no idea who controls our lives, and my personal view is that maybe we should slow down the development of newer technology that does not serve us correctly.