Young people who commit crimes should be punished the same as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A recent trend states that underage offenders must legally answer as adults. The discussion over
this
topic mainly exists due to the idea that adolescents benefit from
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impunity, perpetuating crime. The paragraphs below will outline a strong disagreement towards
this
, explaining that there
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no
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scientific
information to support
this
decision as well as educational methods are more effective to avoid
this
problem relapse in the future.
To begin
with, the main reason to justify is the lack
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to prove that lowering the age of criminal responsibility would be favourable to
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crimes. As a matter of fact, according to the United Nations International Children's Emergency Fund (Unicef), at least 50 countries that had applied
this
reduction in the past, did not experience any change in their rate of transgressions among adolescents.
Thus
, the flawed examples of other nations
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more than enough for
this
measure not to be applied.
Furthermore
, another cogent motive is that educational punishments are more effective to avoid relapse. Investing in violent methods for punishing as a solution would inevitably cause more violence and encourage these minors to rebel.
For instance
, in Brazil, young offenders who were convicted, but were inserted
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the socio-educative system, enrolling in technician programs, were less likely to transgress after being released.
Hence
, authorities should invest in education to resocialize these individuals and give them the opportunity to enhance their life
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. To conclude, I completely disagree with lowering the age of criminal responsibility since many countries tried and there is no information of success, not reaching its purpose.
Moreover
, to resocialize, studying and learning must be the main method, in place of
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.
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