It is suggested that all the young adults should undertake a period of unpaid work helping people in their community. Does it bring more benefits or drawbacks to the community and the young people?

Nowadays, young

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should be encouraged to volunteer more as volunteerism helps them acquire crucial social skills. More importantly, strong and young

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represent a vital resource for

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, it is debated whether the

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advantages outweigh some common disadvantages. Personally, I feel that a period of youth voluntary work is convenient not only for

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but

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for the

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. One of the main benefits that volunteering brings to young

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is to increase opportunities

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employment because they learn some social skills needed in the workplace. First of all,

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develop empathy for others and learn to talk far more effectively to other

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will enable them to develop more communication skills.

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,

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devote a lot of

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to doing things in groups.

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, they are far more likely to be good at working in teams than

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without volunteer experience. A good example is the fact that many employers highly seek volunteering experience in work applications. Meanwhile, the

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benefits from strong

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as there are always heavy tasks to accomplish. There is no doubt that old

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do not possess as much physical strength as young adults do.

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means that young

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may be resources for specific duties in the

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,

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could be allocated to clean the streets of cities. Yet some

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believe that volunteering is disadvantageous for young

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because it is a waste of

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, critics argue that if

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who have completed high school devoted their

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to volunteering, they would stop studying for a period.

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, they would be supposed to go to university or college and gain more knowledge.

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, other

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are of the opinion that

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are often inexpert

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in the

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there are problematic

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as orphans and fragile ill

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means that the

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could not have

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able to deal with these

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because young

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do not have enough experience in it.

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volunteering would allow young

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to be more connected with the real world than they would be by attending academic courses, and,

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, they could learn fast to handle delicate situations with

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initial tutoring by experienced

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. In conclusion, despite the fact that youth volunteering brings some downsides both to young

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as stopping for a

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their career paths and the

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which may have a lack of experienced

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, I’m convinced that a period of voluntary work is an investment of

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for young

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and an indispensable resource for the

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.