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Students generally prefer to choose the period they are supposed to study and the period they are free to have fun. They should be allowed to do their time management. Do you agree or disagree?

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Students
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 are often constricted by the given
schedule
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 of class
time
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 and, break
time
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.
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, the reality is that
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 a large proportion of
students
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 prefer having control over their own
time
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management
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. It is agreed that young adults should
also
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 have the
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 to make
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the decision
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decision
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decisions
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of
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its
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their
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 own
time
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.
This
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 idea would be proved by analysing how individuals can be more effective with the
schedule
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 that are personalised, and well prepared for
real-life
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situation
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situations
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 when
time
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management
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 does fall
on
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under
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 their control.
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, it is crucial to realize that each person has different methods of studying that
works
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work
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 for them.
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, a
student
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 might find themselves highly effective when studying for 4 hours straight, while her friend may find it better to break down into
chuncks
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chunks
 of 30 minutes of work
time
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 with 5 minutes of rest.
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, giving a set of
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schedule
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 takes
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students
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 away from
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 options,
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 creating a limit to their productivity. From the following benefit that
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 evident,
students
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 should be allowed to manage their own
time
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.
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,
students
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 that have been managing their own
schedule
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 whilst at school, are better prepared for
real-life
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situation
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situations
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 at their work.
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, a
student
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who’s
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whose
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 days had
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consistently
consistantly
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consistently
 been managed by their parents would find it difficult when they are
finally
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 away from their parents at work, where strict scheduling no longer
exist
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Such
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issue
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an issue
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 would not have taken place if
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student
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 had been allowed to manage
its
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their
his
her
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 own
time
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 from early on. Ultimately, the importance of being allowed to take charge of your own
time
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 as a
student
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,
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 is highlighted once again. In conclusion, in order for individuals to approach
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 studying, and to develop a
life long
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 skill
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time
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management
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, it is agreed that
students
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 should be able to choose when to study and when not to. From the following analysis, it is predicted that the advantages of early ones taking control of their days
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outweigh
outweighed
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 the negative side, as
improvement
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an improvement
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on
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 productivity and
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 skills are forecasted
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • time management
  • self-discipline
  • personal responsibility
  • motivation
  • engagement
  • peak productivity periods
  • real-world demands
  • effective time management
  • controlled environment
  • learning preferences
  • academic performance
  • potential drawbacks
  • misuse
  • procrastinate
  • frameworks and support
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