In modern society, more and more people live longer. Do you think the benefits of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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life expectancy has been on the rise in recent decades. Personally, I believe that despite the good intentions behind increasing the time people exist, it will be disadvantageous in the long run.

On the other hand

, there is still no denying that high longevity has its own merits.

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, when humans have the ability to live longer, their knowledge and experiences will increase in

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an incredible way. Meanwhile, our world can reach a new peak point

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technology and expand our awareness

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the universe.

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, these days, many parents don’t have enough time to look after their children carefully. When these children’s grandparents can raise their longevity, children can be nurtured by them.

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, critics are quick to point out that a longer lifetime will threaten our world with its drawbacks. Take Japan

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example, having the highest percentage of old citizens and expected to go up rapidly in the future, Japan is facing a serious issue -

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problem.

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trouble can easily affect the national economy and social life. Countries with an

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population usually have a high proportion of foreign workers, which costs those regions a lot. Elderly inhabitants, who spend their

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time in nursing homes, often don’t get full services due to the lack of nurses.

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, we can’t forget the great burden placed on public services, especially

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with free civil services. Hospitals, transports,

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will not be able to tackle

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a giant number of dwellers.

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but not least, the lack of natural resources is

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a problem that can’t be neglected. There is a common belief that our fossil fuel and nonrenewable resources will hit the bottom soon if the death rate in the world is lower than the birth rate. As has been discussed above, the negative points associated with high longevity outweigh its merits.