In many countries school have severe problems with students behavior. What do you think are the causes of this, what solution can you suggest.

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In today's, world many institutions are facing

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issue with the behaviour of students and

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is because of several reasons in

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passage I'll be talking

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about some reasons and

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the solution to reduce the problem. To start the

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reason for students to behave inappropriately is due to lack of parental advice which means taking less care about what children do might cause

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issue. The

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reason is the influence that the kid gets from society and from what they see or watch

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these days kids are watching more movies which contain fights and consuming toxic stuff due to

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teenagers are getting more influenced and behaving like them. The

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and final reason is some kids hate going to school

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If a kid likes the P.T period and doesn't like the maths period

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the behaviour of the kid will be different when those classes start. To reduce these problems the parents should have good care over their children like what they are doing daily

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they need to spend some time with them so they can know more about what they feel about school. The

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step is the style of teaching by the teachers should change like they need to make the subject more interesting by getting more interaction with them

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movies or films need to show fewer fights and toxic subjects which can influence teenagers. To conclude

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

242 words

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In many countries school have severe problems with students behavior. What do you think are the causes of this, what solution can you suggest.

Include an introduction and conclusion

At the present, the population some countries includes relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do advantages of this situation outweigh the diadvantages?

In order to study at universities students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all of the students can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems such as railways and trams. to what extant do you agree or disagree

The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Improvement in health, education, and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping poorer nations in these areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?