There is an increasing trend around the world of married couple deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couple who decide to do this.

In many
countries
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it has become the latest trend that
people
who are married do not want to become parents.
Although
,
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without having
children
couples can achieve more life goals,there is a risk of social isolation for them. The main benefit of not having
children
is that married
people
can go after their dreams without any obstacles.
Moreover
,most
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young
people
who are married have several life goals
such
as
further
education,career prospectives,or more social services.These may not be able to achieve with the
children
, because they have to spend more time and money to look after their
children
.
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,
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latest study done by a charity organization in the UK revealed that most
the
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married individuals
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achieved the most success in their professions and do not have any
children
.
On the contrary
,the downside of not having
children
is the risk of social isolation in their older ages.
This
is because poor physical and mental instability is inevitably entwined with ageing.So individuals need someone who
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to their
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to be with them
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an elderly lives
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.There are no garrets that a married partner will be with them for their lifelong.But, if have a child they may keep in touch with their parents forever.
Furthermore
,
people
can have
good
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quality of elderly living with their
children
and grandchildren.
Otherwise
,they will end up with a lonely life in an elderly care home.
For instance
, research done by the University of Sidney proved that,in Australia ,80 per cent of older
people
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live in adult homes and do not have
children
. In conclusion,there is a gradual rise of married couples deciding not to have
children
.
Although
,
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there is a probability of isolation in society during their later lives,
people
who do not have
children
can achieve more success or more goals without any obstacles.
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