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The way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. Has this become a positive or negative development?

#people #technology #become #development
I would like to apply for the position
of
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advertised position, as
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experienced photographer at your photo studio. I should say I have been doing
for
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 about 3 years in a similar field. I am used to communicating with
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client
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. and my experience in 3 years, always I got it first degree in customer satisfaction. I would like you to have a look at my current set of work responsibilities: Understanding the customer’s request
such
 as (speed, quality, variety, ....). use of the best equipment to capture. and
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 end, I Suggest poses to the participants, I think
this
 item is very important. Thank you for considering and reviewing my job application. my resume
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attach
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,
share
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 my qualifications and past work experience. I will look forward to having a detailed conversation at your soonest
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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