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Some say it is better to learn a foreign language in a primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Some old men suggest that it is more
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 that people
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 learning a foreign
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primary
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 school
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 of secondary school for stop
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, some people point out that disadvantages of these are word that drawbacks.
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, a child who learns earlier than someone will likely
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 to master it and add
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cognitive benefits
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thought
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 he has albeit confusion with their native tongue, is not valid . The main reason to start kids off with
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 foreign
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that
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make
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 them
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speak
out
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fluently in adulthood.
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, they will have more years to perfect their skills and it would seem perfectly normal to speak
bilingual
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.
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 written
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some research that kids under age 5 have
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brain
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 and it has
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the ability
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 to learn at most 20 languages and
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 benefits the overall development of a child.
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, they were able to speak the
language
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 accurately at an
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 level.
In contrast
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, some people say that it causes a child confused between their mother tongue and the other
language
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.
However
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, there’s no one who supports
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 view. My niece was brought up speaking triple Burmese, English and native
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 and outperforms most of her classmates. On balance, the fact that early foreign
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 leads to higher fluency and improved bring function clearly outweighs the flawed argument that it impairs uptake of native languages.

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