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Influence of human beings on the worlds ecosystem is leading to the extinction of species and loss of biodiversity. Causes and solutions

#influence #beings #worlds #ecosystem #extinction #species #loss #biodiversity
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Since the
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 industrial revolution, humanity has witnessed an increase in the destruction of ecosystems, with several species across the globe teetering on the edge of extinction.
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 the current situation is alarming, there are several solutions that can be put in place to at least reduce
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frightly
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 process. One of the main
cause
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for
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 deforestation and other non-friendly environmental actions is economic greed. Individuals are interested in
profiting
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 at any cost. There
several
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 reasons for
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 situation and causes are profits particularly real state businesses (mining and agriculture ) # solutions - more regulatory laws and enverimontaly friend solutions
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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