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" There is the too much stress in the working place. What can employess and employers do about it "

Co-ordination coordination plays an important role for both
staff
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 and employers in the companies or institutions. whereas whole
staff
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 have to do a hard-working, they have to face a lot of physically and mentally problems and
weight
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 is the main problem in one of them.
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 , the
first
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 reason is that from top-level management to supervision level everyone has targets, which they have to fulfil in the required time or period.
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endeavor
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 is divided into different categories, they have to complete their daily clerical or other job duties or responsibilities.
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, the risk analysis and profit or loss are
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 considered causes of
weight
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;
for example
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, if the
company
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 goes into loss, the employer and higher management have to face the stress of loans and liabilities
similarly
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department
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departments
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 have to face the
weight
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 of new
company
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 policies and plans which are altered due to profit or loss of the
company
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. There are some strategies which are useful to reduce the
weight
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 problem
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 as
weight
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 is mainly attached to the mental health of the human being, it should always be stable to focus on the different required tasks on
effort
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.
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, the whole
staff
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 of the
company
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 should that whom to calm in a difficult situation;
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, those members of the working team who are created easily panic in a hard-working environment, have to do some brain exercises
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 as meditation.
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, it is
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 the duty of all employers that they should have to provide free yoga classes or camps for personnel to reduce stress.
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, it is psychologically true that motivation is considered the best strategy for
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department
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 to perform well in companies. Because it is useful to motivate
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department
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departments
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 by promoting their job duties and responsibilities,
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the department
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department
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 will be more focused on their required tasks with a stable mind.
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, employers should provide them limited
effort
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 because if they
effort
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overtime
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 they cannot take proper rest and get sleeping disorders which is the
second
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 form of
weight
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. In conclusion, as stress is a serious problem related to the mind, it can affect the performance of
staff
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 as well as management. So, the senior authorities of the
company
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 should always adapt new alterations in the techniques of work which should be helpful to reduce
effort
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.

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