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people now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages ?

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Nowadays,
technology
 plays a vital in our daily life.
People
 have the liberty to
work
 and live where they want to due to the increase in transportation and communication
technology
. Some
people
 appreciate
this
 development and others think that it has drawbacks. I personally believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
This
 essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of
technology
 and
transport
 in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there are numerous advantages of communication
technology
 and
transport
. Now,
People
 have more options to
work
. Some
people
 prefer to
work
 from home and some prefer to commute daily to an office. There are different types of
transport
 available private and public. It is
people
's personal choice to choose them.
Moreover
, they do not need to stay away from their parents now they can easily travel via bus, car, or bike.
For instance
, one of my friends is
work
 from home. He has flexible timing to
work
 and he has
also
 a healthy relationship with his family. It is a really appreciable approach.
On the other hand
, some
people
 think that there are some cons to
this
 approach.
Firstly
, carbon emission increases due to an increase in
transport
 on the road. There are some environmental issues.
Secondly
,
people
's lifestyles become sedentary. They have some physical issues
such
 as obesity, diabetes and cancer. To illustrate, a survey conducted by Uk found that 70% of
people
 are suffering from diabetes and obesity due to sedentary lifestyles.
In addition
, most of them
work
 from home. To conclude, in my opinion,
this
 development has both pros and cons. I believe that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
People
 have lots of options to
work
 they can enjoy a better lifestyle.
Submitted by Rajwinder Kaur on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication technology
  • transportation
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • freedom
  • work and live
  • development
  • increased job opportunities
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • cultural exposure
  • diversity
  • economic growth
  • globalization
  • social isolation
  • loneliness
  • loss of community
  • sense of belonging
  • expensive cost of living
  • housing
  • strain on infrastructure
  • resources
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