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In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the two
dimentional
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dimensional
 arts
such
 as painting and motion video are getting popular. It has been a widespread argument that those are an effective
way
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 to deliver messages. I extremely agree with the given statement and
this
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Firstly
,
image
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the image
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 can articulate louder than words and it is considered to be more representative. It
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 precisely even
for
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the sarcastic and
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 images.
For instance
, the caricature of demonstrators drives stakeholders to change the policy regarding
the
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gender inequality.
In addition
, sending written messages only can
also
 lead
people
 to misunderstand the pragmatic meaning, since it has no intonation or suprasegmental context.
For instance
,
people
 will use smile emoticons so it will represent a positive ambience or fire emoticons to represent
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negative feelings.
Secondly
,
image
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 may become a weapon to persuade
people
, not only for hooking the viewers but
also
 to addict the product consumers. If videos are used to support the presentation, it may give a chance to hit
people
's
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 deep inside. To illustrate, in a thesis
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defence
, students use
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powerpoint
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PowerPoint
 to make ideas
presentation
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 and attract teachers to give them a high score.
Besides
, in some cases, the effective way to motivate
people
 in many ways is by presenting
image
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 frequently, so it gives more
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people
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 to decide to
finally
 use
it
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.
For example
, an advertisement agency put
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product's
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adsense
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AdSense
Adsense
to
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 the youtube channel to increase
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 traffic. To conclude, pictures become a trend to aspire ideas
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 many occasions. It can be seen that it becomes more effective to articulate messages.
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