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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should be responsible for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Environmental protection is crucial for the city, some people believe that the
government
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 should take responsibility while others state that citizens should be responsible.
This
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 essay will investigate both views and agrees with the latter opinion. On the one hand, there are two reasons why the
government
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 should be responsible. The main reason is that the
government
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 can set up policies to protect the
environment
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.
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, they can set up
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 rubbish bag charging scheme, so under economic pressure, people will tend to throw less rubbish and reduce landfill waste. Another reason is that the
government
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 can educate citizens. They can hold some talks at schools or make some advertisements about how to protect the
environment
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 through the TV so it can allow people to understand how to be more environmentally friendly.
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, the
government
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 can have many ways to protect the
environment
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, so they should be responsible.
On the other hand
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, there are two reasons why
individuals
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 should be responsible.
Firstly
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, their behaviours affect the
environment
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 the most. If everyone changes their habits a bit,
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 as throwing less trash or taking more public
transports
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, those actions can provide huge effects on the
environment
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.
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, its
citizens’ choice
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citizens
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 to choose
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follow the
government
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’s advice.
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, when the
government
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 provide suggestions and advice on how to protect the
environment
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, if the
individuals
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 do not follow them, it's still ineffective in protecting the
environment
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.
As a result
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,
although
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individuals
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 seem neglectable, if everyone can do it together, it will have a huge effect. To conclude,
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government
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the government
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 may have stronger power to control citizens, whether
individuals
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 cooperate or not is more important, so they have more responsibility.

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