Some people believe that non-academic subjects at school should be removed from the syllabus so that children can concentrate wholly on academic subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I vehemently disagree that non-academic
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should not be taught
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. I believe that these
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play a vital role in promoting
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' success and wellbeing.
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the one hand, non-academic
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are less important than academic ones.
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,
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, like physical education can help improve
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' fitness and physical health.
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,
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will have a profound impact on
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' scholastic performance.
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, if pupils achieve success in sports, they will be qualified to obtain scholarships overseas.
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, they will have a better opportunity of receiving a better education than the one they can receive in their home countries.
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, studying
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like cookery
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can help
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to discover their talents, and they will be able to determine their future profession.
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, researchers have discovered that it is crucial to focus on other aspects of learning,
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as emotional and social ones. Adults are not only required to achieve intellectual success, but they should be
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able to handle stress. Children who learn PE in schools can maintain stress levels.
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, when kids play sports in groups, they will acquire social skills including, collaboration and communication skills, which will be needed in the workforce later on.
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, studying these
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will boost children's self-confidence which will help them to overcome obstacles they may face in the future.
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, those who are involved in the
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of selecting school
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should acknowledge the fact that education should not merely focus on Math,
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languages or sciences, but it should
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present other non-academic
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that can improve
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mental, physical and social skills.
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