People in many countries are spending less time with their family. What are the reasons, and effects of this?

In modern life, there
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more and more
people
absence
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of
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family
time
.
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essay will analyze the major causes and possible influences of
this
phenomenon. There are a variety
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for
this
case,
however
, there are two leading reasons.
Firstly
, because of the demands of modern life, many
people
have to face more pressure than ever to earn money and success. In countries like Japan where most adults spend the major proportion of their life working, they tend to stay at work until late
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and they find it harder to have
time
for themselves than with their loved ones.
Secondly
, modern technological developments have drawn most
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people’s
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attention to social media platforms and networks. Some of them are even addicted to these types of technology and ignore
people
around them.
For example
, according to the Digital 2021 report of digital advertising company We Are Social (UK) Viet Nam has about 72 million social network users, equivalent to more than 73% of the population. Most of them spend more than 3 hours a day on social media and will become annoyed if they are not used for 1-2 days. The detriments of
this
trend are severe. But the
first
consequence worth mentioning is increasing the distance between family members.
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time
members in the family can communicate with each other, making family bonds lower leading to misunderstandings and unnecessary conflict.
Moreover
, parents who are flooded with work schedules will have insufficient
time
for educating their children, which explains
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the increase in juvenile delinquencies,
anti-social
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behaviors
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more serious
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high-level crime and violence.
Last
but not least, not communicating for a long
time
can lead to loneliness and depression, which has negative effects on health. In conclusion,
people
are having less and less
time
with family largely due to work and study pressures, and the impacts of
this
on both individuals and families are severe.
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  • commitments
  • imbalance
  • digital technology
  • social media
  • globalization
  • weakened
  • disconnected
  • strain
  • stress
  • mental health issues
  • developmental issues
  • behavioral problems
  • parental guidance
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