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Nowadays many business meetings and training are happening online and not in real offices. Do you think the advantages of this approach outweigh the disadvantages?

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In our modern society, it is quite easy to find
people
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 having
business
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 online meetings and training. Especially after 2020, the number of online
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 meetings has increased rapidly because of
thecovid
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the corvid
 situation all over the world. Doing
business
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 meetings and training online has
advantages
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 and
disadvantages
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. In my point of view, I believe that the
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 of
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 outweigh the
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.
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, one of the
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 of doing
business
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 online is that reducing
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time
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 of going to offices directly.
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businesses
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business man
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businessman
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have
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 to spend 80 minutes on average toward their offices,
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 it gives stress on
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, especially those who take a crowded train in Tokyo. A survey conducted by the Japanese government showed that the stress level of
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 who do not take train has decreased.
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,
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 makes clear that doing
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 online has the advantage in terms of reducing
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 for going
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 workplace.
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, one of the
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 of doing
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 online is that it is difficult to make good
relationships
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 between workers.
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people
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 can talk in
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way
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 during breaking
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 in their office, which leads to making good
relationships
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 between them.
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, it is enabled to have enough
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 to communicate well in the environment online,
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 the majority of the freshmen who do not have enough communication
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 face to face answered that they do not feel have good
relationships
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 with coworkers.
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, it becomes apparent that doing
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 online has
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 disadvantage in terms of making good
relationships
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 with better communication. To sum up, there are both
advantages
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 and
disadvantages
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 of doing
business
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 online. I agreed with the statement that the
advantages
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 of
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way
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 outweigh the
disadvantages
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 because reducing commute week and stress levels have a big impact on
people
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´s mental health. After a thorough analysis of
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 subject, it is predicted that researchers will investigate a better
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 to use an online environment for
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opportunity
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, and
then
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 the number of online businesses working will be increased more in the future.

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