Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment. Why is this happening and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem.

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There are a lot of criminals who repeat their crimes after they were reconvicted. Certainly, the number of criminals depends on several reasons. And I would like to start with the
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. Unfortunately, in Russia there
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lot of small towns with
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of robberies. It happened due to
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jail, the
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will be repeated.
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, some individuals have unequal mental
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again and again. There are several possible measures to decrease the
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of crimes after the
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punishment.
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of all,
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should increase financial help to families who
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stuff for education.
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a special program for people who did a
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crime
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of tablets. Certainly, the conditions in the jails must be comfortable and consist of all kinds of facilities. It is necessary to create
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life and to involve criminals
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nutshell, I suppose that the main
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in the criminal sphere bring
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recidivism
  • rehabilitation programs
  • social stigma
  • ex-convicts
  • reintegration
  • support systems
  • mental health issues
  • addiction problems
  • criminal networks
  • incarceration
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