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Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment. Why is this happening and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem.

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There are a lot of criminals who repeat their crimes after they were reconvicted. Certainly, the number of criminals depends on several reasons. And I would like to start with the
first
 of them.
Firstly
,
the
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society has
great
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impact
into
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 the
level
 of
crime
.
For instance
, if
person
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the person
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 was growth in
the
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 negative environment, he or she will repeat
crime
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the crime
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. Unfortunately, in Russia there
a
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lot of small towns with
high
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a high
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level
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 of robberies. It happened due to
lack
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 of workplaces and low salaries. Certainly, if
person
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arrive
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 in
this
 place after
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jail, the
crime
 will be repeated.
Secondly
, some individuals have unequal mental
treatments
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.
Consequently
, despite on positive
impact
 of correction
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labor
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 they will do a
crime
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crimes
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 again and again. There are several possible measures to decrease the
level
 of crimes after the
first
 punishment.
First
 of all,
government
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the government
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 should increase financial help to families who
lives
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under
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the
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level
 of poverty. It will allow
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to provide
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 children
all
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necessary
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 stuff for education.
Secondly
,
government
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the government
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 need
create
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 a special program for people who did a
crime
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crimes
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.
This
 program must include financial
impact
,
list
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a list
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 of possible workplaces. If somebody has mental treatment,
government
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the government
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 should provide them
different
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kind
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 of tablets. Certainly, the conditions in the jails must be comfortable and consist of all kinds of facilities. It is necessary to create
positive
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 view
on
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 life and to involve criminals
into
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 the free life. To put it
on
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the
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 nutshell, I suppose that the main
impact
 in the criminal sphere bring
government
.
That is
 why politics are responsible for
level
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the level
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 of
live
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 and
crime
.
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