In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?
Throughout the world, the consumption of fast
foods
has increased to an
Change the article
a
larming
height due to it being an affordable alternative lifestyle. Its cheap, quick and stuffing nature has led to Correct your spelling
alarming
to
lots of people including it Remove the redundancy
apply
into
their regular diets. Change preposition
in
However
, fast foods
are infamous for containing a high amount of processed fats that can lead to serious health issues like heart disease, obesity
and type 2 diabetes if over-consumed. This
leads me to strongly agree that urgency is needed in regualating
the consumption of these goods.
Fast Correct your spelling
regulating
foods
are often lineups of food
with high levels of fats. Consuming such
products
daily could seriously affect the health of individuals, with the consequences of getting chronic diseases such
as type 2 diabetes. Furthermore
, illness
like Fix the agreement mistake
illnesses
obesity
could cause problems in patients
daily life, but it would Change noun form
patients'
patient's
also
deteriorate the chances of survival when fighting against other diseases. The effect of obesity
is unfortunately seen at young ages too. In fact in the UK, there has been a rising number of children who suffer from obesity
. Hence
, immediate government intervention is required to push consumers away from junk food
products
.
In addition
, by
placing a higher tax rate on Change preposition
apply
such
products
it
sends out a signal to fast Correct pronoun usage
apply
food
companies to change its
field of competition. With higher Correct pronoun usage
their
taxes
consumption of fast Add a comma
,taxes
foods
would drop, and in order to avoid further
downfall of the Add an article
the further
market
, leaders would be nudged to shift their market
strategy to a service that would have higher demand in the near future. Hence
, in the long run
it would reduce Add a comma
,run
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the numbers
numbers
of junk Fix the agreement mistake
number
foods
provided by the fast
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fast-food
food
market
. A prime example of a company changing its competition field is FUJIFILM company in Japan. Originally the company sold film camera products
, however
seeing the fall in their
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its
market
, they have shifted its
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their
market
to medical equipment.
In conclusion, examining the detrimental effects of fast food
products
, I strongly agree for governments to raise taxes on such
goods. This
way, it would save people out of
unhealthy diets, but Change preposition
from
also
create an opportunity for junk food
markets to redesign their business model.Submitted by akichanskk on
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