In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

Throughout the world, the consumption of fast
foods
has increased to
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larming
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height due to it being an affordable alternative lifestyle. Its cheap, quick and stuffing nature has led to
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lots of people including it
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their regular diets.
However
, fast
foods
are infamous for containing a high amount of processed fats that can lead to serious health issues like heart disease,
obesity
and type 2 diabetes if over-consumed.
This
leads me to strongly agree that urgency is needed in
regualating
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regulating
the consumption of these goods. Fast
foods
are often lineups of
food
with high levels of fats. Consuming
such
products
daily could seriously affect the health of individuals, with the consequences of getting chronic diseases
such
as type 2 diabetes.
Furthermore
,
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like
obesity
could cause problems in
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daily life, but it would
also
deteriorate the chances of survival when fighting against other diseases. The effect of
obesity
is unfortunately seen at young ages too. In fact in the UK, there has been a rising number of children who suffer from
obesity
.
Hence
, immediate government intervention is required to push consumers away from junk
food
products
.
In addition
,
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placing a higher tax rate on
such
products
it
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sends out a signal to fast
food
companies to change
its
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field of competition. With higher
taxes
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consumption of fast
foods
would drop, and in order to avoid
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downfall of the
market
, leaders would be nudged to shift their
market
strategy to a service that would have higher demand in the near future.
Hence
, in the long
run
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it would reduce
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numbers
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of junk
foods
provided by the
fast
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food
market
. A prime example of a company changing its competition field is FUJIFILM company in Japan. Originally the company sold film camera
products
,
however
seeing the fall in
their
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market
, they have shifted
its
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market
to medical equipment. In conclusion, examining the detrimental effects of fast
food
products
, I strongly agree for governments to raise taxes on
such
goods.
This
way, it would save people
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unhealthy diets, but
also
create an opportunity for junk
food
markets to redesign their business model.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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