Some people believe that longer prison sentences are the best way to decrease crime, while others think there are alternative ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Crime
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is increasing globally with every passing day. Law enforcement agencies and authorities are trying to curb
this
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crime
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ratio. Some people argue that prison is the ultimate way to reduce
crime
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.
however
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, Others believe that agencies should introduce
rehabilitation
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to reduce
crime
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. In
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essay, I shall discuss both arguments followed by the conclusion.  
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with, many people think that extended
imprisonment
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is beneficial to curb a
crime
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. They argue that
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extended
imprisonment
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creates fear in
criminals
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.
This
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fear helps to reduce
crime
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.
Moreover
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, there will be less
crime
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as most
criminals
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are already in jail. 
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, I believe there are alternative ways to reduce
crime
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.
Imprisonment
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just punishes the criminal but we have to make
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criminal a better citizen of the country. For
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purpose, a good
rehabilitation
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program should be provided to every criminal.
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,
this
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program will tell us why
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particular
crime
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occur.
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,
this
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program will help us to find the circumstances or reason for the
crime
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.
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will educate us
why
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on why
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people do crimes and what laws we can introduce to prevent the particular
crime
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.
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, we have to equip
criminals
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with some good skills so they can return to their jobs once released.
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, in Pakistan authorities gives them vocational training.
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, we can reduce
crime
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with
rehabilitation
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and equip
criminals
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with better skills so they can be useful members of society. To Conclude, extended
imprisonment
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may have some benefits. More scientific approaches
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as
rehabilitation
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programs have more benefits for reducing
crime
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. These programs just
not
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do not
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punish the
criminals
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but make them better citizens.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • incarceration
  • recidivism
  • deterrence
  • rehabilitation
  • restorative justice
  • probation
  • community service
  • incapacitate
  • social programs
  • root causes
  • accountability
  • punitive measures
  • preventive measures
  • recidivist
  • vocational programs
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