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Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some would argue that
children
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 should be taught to become well mannered individuals in a s society by their
parents
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, while others believe that it should be incorporated in school teaching because both
parents
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 are employed nowadays and does not have enough time to spend on
children
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. I believe that a child should be taught about
manners
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 and etiquette by their
parents
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 starting from early childhood. On the one hand, it is argued by few that educational institutes plays an important role in developing a child behavior, because both the mother ad father are engaged in their career development,
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 they ignore to guide their
children
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 to behave appropriately. So it often believed by some
parents
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 that these unacceptable behaviors are corrected and trained in a good way at schools.
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:- "time outs" are given as a punishment to discipline them.
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, I believe that it is impossible for the teacher to pay attention to each and ever student in a class,
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 good
manners
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 are forgotten.
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,
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 are
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's
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 mentors. Adults should take responsibility to educate and act as a role model to their offspring, regarding basic
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, values and acceptable behaviors starting at a very young age.
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:- Recent studies have proven that,
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 learn
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 best by observing their
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 behavior to others. I
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 believe that coaching young kids about basic
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 by their
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 is vital to become a good person in the community. In conclusion,
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 some
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 think that the schools should put efforts to make their
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 a better person, I argue that
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 are simply responsible for their child's upbringing and they should begin
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 process from a very young age.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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