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The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or not?

#road #safety #punishments #offenses
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a secure place for
public
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 who want to use these for transportation is a
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 situation for governments
that
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they want to create
the
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 series of
laws
 which are useful for preventing accidents ,so ,some opine
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 torture is a good way to make people would avoid from breaking the
laws
 of driving ,
however
, others have stated
awards
 are
also
 potential to building better behaviours on staying in-
lawslaws
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laws laws
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,
finally
, I would prefer to choose both for managing drivers that they are a lawful person on the roads,for
this
 reason, I am going to bring some piece of evidence to explore pros and cons of these approaches. In a beginning , in 2022, the UK has been studied the number of accidents that have happened due to passing from the standard speed in subways , in support of
this
 study many countries have repeated
this
 exploration of their information and reached the same results that have stated the tight
laws
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 controlling factor for preventing from high-speed for cars ,
as a result
 ,it has seen a significant improvement on crush accidental events ,so,these countries that have tight
lawslaws
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laws laws
 are more successful in
this
 regard.
On the other hand
, the system of punishment is not the only way to manage society to make them
behaving
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proper on the streets ,
for example
 ,when the UK has
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considered
awards
 for individuals who have not a history of breaking
laws
 during their driving in a year ,suddenly ,the percentage of little driving crimes
such
 as parking in forbidden places or passing a red light has been dropped ,so, it is confirmed governments can be used from
awards
 to encourage their citizens that they are a lawful driver. To summarize,policymakers must consider a great punishment for high-speeding to prevent accidents on roads and give
awards
 for little deviation from normal driving behaviour
such
 as parking in unallowing places and passing from a red light ,
finally
 , punishment is not the only factor to encourage people to be a lawful citizen.
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