A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be a suitable for him/her. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter - tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves - say why you think the job would be suitable for him/ her - explain how to apply for the job

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Hi Indi, Hope you're doing well and I'm writing

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regarding a job opportunity in Sri Lanka which you were expecting for a longer period. The vacancy is for an Associate ERP Consultant at DMS Software Technologies Pvt Ltd.

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interesting employment because it is not a routine job. Tasks involved were listed as requirement gathering, conducting user

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prepare

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user manuals, client handling, go-live support etc.

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, you will be able to act as a Project Manager if you're performing well in two

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time. I think

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it will be an ideal opportunity since you're having the required skill with your MIS

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degree.

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to that, it's a well-paid occupation with industry exposure. You'll get the opportunity to deal with the senior management of companies enabling

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enhance your contacts. The application process seems to be very convenient as per the website

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. You only need to send a copy of your latest CV to their company email address which is [email protected]. I wish you all the best for the interview and I am waiting for

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. With love,

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Thuya

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8 paragraphs

194 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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