What are some of the factors in modern society that causes this stress and how we can reduce it?

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In the modern era, the stressful become easier affects
people
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. It is because of the pressure and the workload that can't be handled by the
employees
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. In
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I will discuss the cause of the stress and the way to reduce it.
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, in
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the pressures have become higher and higher.
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, to follow the needs with the prices are more expensive, the
people
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force themself to work more.
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, the amount of
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has
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become less than before. It impacts the competition to get a job. Nowadays, the minimum standard to get good
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is
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bachelor's
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as a result
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of the competition.
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,
people
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who have
jobs
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will survive with their
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otherwise
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it will so stressful because
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pressure and working hours. A few of the options to be a worker has made
people
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are under pressure,
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the
company
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willing to increase their profit which reduces the salaries and give more working hours. In one word, an
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has no option and is still forced to work at that
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.
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, there are solutions to reduce the stress,
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as a guarantee of healthy with good salaries. But, the
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can't do it by themself,
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is why government must take responsibility. The change in the
regulation
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will help the
employee
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,
instead
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of giving cash to the
employee
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. It will impact the
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regulations too, and the
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will guarantee the life of the
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. No more overload of workloads and work hours,
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they get insurance for their health condition.
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,
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must make a group to defend injustices of the
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's
regulation
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. In conclusion, to defend against injustice
regulation
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of the companies, the government need to take charge to build a
regulation
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to help the
employees
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.
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,
employees
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must make a union and can discuss with the
company
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's regulator before they released the
regulation
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