Some people believe that violence in the media, such as in television programs and films, directly results in violent behaviour. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, there are more and more tv programs and movies with
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scene, some
people
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believe that
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causes
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activities,
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agree
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statement. On the one hand, some
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may copy from the scene.
People
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especially teenagers may copy the
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behaviours, as they are immature enough,
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cannot distinguish whether the behaviour is correct or not.
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, some films describe the character who perform
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activities as heroes or popular students. After watching those scene in the movies, some students may think that fighting with each other
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cool, they may
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bully others as they want to draw
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attention and become popular at school.
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, they will copy
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them and undergo the same activity
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other
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will promote violent behaviour.
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,
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tend to be less aware
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violence
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. When
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always watch
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fighting in tv programs, they may feel like it is normal to do so as it is always performed on tv,
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causes them not to think of the consequence of doing so. When they see
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fighting with each
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on the street, they
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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