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The world is experiencing a dramatic increase in population. This is causing problems not only for the poor in undeveloped countries but also for industrialised and developing nations. Describe some of the problems that overpopulation causes, and suggest at least one possible solution.

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The world is facing many problems recently. One of them is overpopulation, and it is a major dilemma and a cause of an economic and environmental crisis. Both in first and
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 the solutions . The rising number of different kinds of industries and the increasing demand for food and water, resulted in air and water pollution,
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 having new kinds of disease. for ,example the number of
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 elevated in
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climate change is
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 one of those problems, and now we are suffering from sudden fires in the forest
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 as Amazon forests, which led to a decrease in the oxygen and creatures in it as well. all
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 has negative impacts on us in different ways, financially and even environmentally. we can solve
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 by raising the awareness of the nations both in poor and rich communities, so not only the governments will work towards solving those problems, but
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we can use organic food since it is much healthier. Birth control could be another method to regulate the number of births, for ,instance some societies have strict rules about how many children you could have,
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 , all people around the world are affected by overpopulation, and that causes health and economic issues which require us to work together and develop fields
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

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A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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