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Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your generation different from your parent's generation? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.

As
time
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things
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 going around
also
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changes
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,
as a result
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, we see many differences
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 our
and
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generation and
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our
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parent's
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parents'
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generation
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. There are a
lot
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 of things which make many differences in one
generation
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 and in the next
generation
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. In my opinion, I agree with the statement
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, and
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 I think the
use
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 of the internet and the development of
transportation
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 sources are the two main factors
,
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apply
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 which make a significant contrast between my
generation
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 and my
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parent's
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parents'
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generation
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, which I will explore in
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First,
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as an initial point, I would like to say that nowadays the
facility
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 of the Internet has changed so many things,
such
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 as the
use
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 of social media, online studies, smartphones, smartwatches and many more. During my
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parent's
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parents'
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,
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generation
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there
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, there
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 was no
such
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facility
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and
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, and
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therefore
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 they
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 to spend a
lot
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 of
time
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 managing their routine work.
For example
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,
My
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 parents used to tell me that to talk with their friends, who are living very far, they either
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 to write a letter to them or
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 to book a call for communication, which is very easy in the present scenario. Nowadays, I just have to
do
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send
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 a message on
phone
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the phone
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 or on my social account
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 instantly I get in touch with any of our friends, it doesn't matter where they are living. Second is the development of
transportation
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 sources. Today, we have various ways of
transportation
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; either by bus, car, train, ship or aeroplane
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, and
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 their
facility
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has
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have
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 improved a
lot
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 from my
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parent's
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parents'
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time
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. Now
for
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, for
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 the shortest
distance
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distance,
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also we
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we also
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 have an aeroplane
facility
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or
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, or
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 we can
use
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 our own aircraft. But, at the
time
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 of my
,
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parents
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parents,
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 everything was present; the bus, car, ship, train and aeroplane
but
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 their number and frequency
was
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were
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 very less and
therefore
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, for the shortest
distance
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distance,
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 they
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 to
use
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 either a bus or their own car. In conclusion, I believe that
,
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 the Internet and development in
transportation
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 have changed a
lot
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 of
stuff
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things
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 nowadays, which
was
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were
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 not present during my parents'
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 period.

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Make a plan at the start and finish with a short wrap up.
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Keep one idea in each paragraph and link them with simple words.
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Give clear examples for each point.
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Use easy linking words such as also, but, and, then to move ideas.
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Check small errors in grammar and spelling.
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You show two main changes and a view on why they differ.
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You use simple examples that show life now vs old life.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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