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It is important for people to take risks, both in their personal lives and professional lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risk outweigh the disadvantages

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, it is crucial for individuals to take uncertainty in their private lives and their working lives. From my point of view,
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 taking risks will help
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 to improve their skills, became successful in
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, and make profits
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 their company, it
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 has some drawbacks which will be discussed in
this
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 essay. On the one hand, one of the advantages of taking
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risk
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risks
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 is that
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risk
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 circumstances will
be
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able
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able
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push individuals to improve their skills. To illustrate, if
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beginners in driving are forced to drive
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 the real road, they will develop their skills
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driving.
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, uncertain situations
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 a game changer.
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, when
people
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 make a high-
risk
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 decision to leave their routine job in order to run their own
business
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, they have
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 high
risk
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 to get
failed
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.
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, if their
business
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are
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 profitable, they will be successful in
life
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.
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, one of the obvious disadvantages of taking uncertainty is that it can cause
people
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fail
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 in
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 to say, if folk invest a large amount of money
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 their
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, they may become
bankcrupt
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bankrupt
 when their
business
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fail
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. On top of that, it
make
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people
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 unemployed. In simple terms, when individuals resign
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 routine job to be self-employed and
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their
thir
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their
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 is fail, they will not have money
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self-supporting
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. To summarize, taking
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risk
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risks
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 has some merits and setbacks, I personally believe that the advantages of it
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outweigh
outweight
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outweigh
 the disadvantages.
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