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Some feel that schools should be mixed with both girls and boys attending while others feel the genders ought to be separated. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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While
 certain concerned individuals feel that education is superior in single-sex
schools
, others value the integration of genders. In my opinion, though there are advantages related to focusing on segregating the sexes, students benefit socially from mixed
schools
. Those who are in favour of separating the genders argue students will be more dedicated to their studies. The reasons for
this
 are largely self-evident as many of the interactions between
boys
 and
girls
 after they reach puberty can be distracting. There is even strong evidence that
girls
-only
schools
 engender
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 results. A recent study of institutions in Europe indicated that students at female-only
schools
 scored higher on average on national exams. There might be a variety of reasons for
this
 but many have seized on gender segregation as the primary catalyst for increased concentration and
thus
 improved
overall
 academic achievement.
However
, the single study mentioned above does not discount the social value of
schools
 featuring both genders. School is a place to develop not only academically, but socially as well. The fact that there may be uncomfortable interactions between
girls
 and
boys
while
 they mature is not a drawback but a learning experience.
Boys
 and
girls
, as they become men and women, will slowly learn how to talk with the opposite sex and find themselves in a better situation upon graduation. Without the opportunity to integrate socially with another
gender
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 there is a strong chance they will have difficulty communicating later and
this
 may promote a lifelong habit of centring their social interactions on rigid gender groups. In conclusion, despite the positive impact on attention that separating
boys
 and
girls
 can have, the maturing effect of mixed classrooms is more important. There is a place for single-sex institutions but the majority should include both.
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