More and more adults are playing computer games. why do you think is the reason for this. what are the good and bad things about playing computer games.
In my everyday experience and obvious that many case has advantages and disadvantageous and I will explain my point of view in
people
like playing computer games
with their friends or relatives. This
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There have been known that online games
have many positive effects on people
's life. People
can learn to cooperate with other people
and also
good communication. They can improve their language skills with computer games
. So this
case should have benefited their education with many other things. Many people
are keen on these games
because they really like spending leisure time
with this
activity. However
, they believe that people
who make them happy, do these things.
Besides
, many people
impact negatively this
situation and their parents should be very nervous in this
case nowadays. They really want to live that with these games
but it affects them badly because these games
are the essential role of their characters so if they play terrible games
they will be affected negatively. Hence
, they need to avoid playing time
in this
stage.
To sum up, people
require to balance playing games
also
they can manage to time
in the daily routine. Because they have more accessible time
in a day and also
they can spend other things effectively. My point of view is that people
need to balance what they do in a daily routine. If people
spend much time
playing games
, they will damage their mind, health or daily routines. As a
result
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people
should know that spending much
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a lot of
time
playing games
will Correct your spelling
harmful
harmfull
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harmful
their
life certainly.Change preposition
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