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Band 4.5

Although there are a lot of translation software available, learning a language could still be advantageous. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the modern world, folks tend to travel more than in the past decades. A reason is that globalization influenced being more interested in different cultures and countries. In that way, mobile applications are used by
travelers
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travellers

The spelling of travelers is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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 to communicate with others. In stark contrast, some others prefer having classes of languages. I too totally agree with
this
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 view and the reasons
of
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for

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 my inclination are explained in trailed paragraphs. In the beginning, millennial groups are used to technology.
In other words
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, when they are in trouble, they like using their cellphones for the internet and have quickly the answer. It has been surveyed by
local
Add an article
a local
the local

The noun phrase local newspaper seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 newspaper that, folks used mostly apps for almost every type of travel service because it is the fastest and the easiest.
Nevertheless
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, learning new languages benefit
turist
Correct your spelling
tourist

If you don’t want turist to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

in the cultural and social aspect. To explain,
in
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at

The preposition in may be incorrect. Consider changing it to another preposition.

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 the moment when students
were introduce
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were introduced

It appears that the form of the verb introduce does not work with were in this sentence.

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in
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to

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the
Correct article usage
apply

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learning
of
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apply

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a new idiom, they simultaneously know about
food
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the food

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 and manners of the country.
For example
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, an article from a local newspaper said that knowing the way of living and popular dialects have the advantage
to
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of

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 not
been
Wrong verb form
being

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb been. Consider changing it.

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 lost in
the
Correct article usage
a

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 foreign country.
Therefore
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, having language
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classes
class

If you don’t want clases to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

clases
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classes

If you don’t want clases to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

is an advantage to
visit
Wrong verb form
visiting

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb visit. Consider changing it.

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 new cities. In summary, I think studying in
an idiom shools
Correct the article-noun agreement
idiom shools
an idiom shool

The indefinite article an may not be required with the plural noun shools in this sentence. Consider removing the article, or changing the noun to singular.

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 is amazing in order to know more about the country you want to visit and to
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speak
speack
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speak

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clearly with the natives. I suggest if someone wants to travel it is recommended to learn about its language.

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Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural Appreciation
  • Cognitive Flexibility
  • Idiomatic Expressions
  • Career Advancement
  • Multilingual
  • Proficiency
  • Empathy
  • Cultural Barriers
  • Native Speaker Fluency
  • Colloquialisms
  • Language Acquisition
  • Immersive Experience
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