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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

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Foreign
education
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 has become one of the most
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 ventures in
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 day and age. A majority of students plan on pursuing higher
education
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 in a foreign nation, especially when it comes to a master’s degree. One of the reasons why studying abroad has become
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 a popular phenomenon is the relaxation of travel laws and procedures across the world.
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, there are pros and cons to studying abroad and the following paragraphs, will explore the topic and elaborate on why the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. One of the primary reasons for studying abroad is the presence of a more refined and sophisticated
education
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 system in several
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 countries. It is common for students from underdeveloped or developing countries like Brazil, China, India, Argentina and other countries to look for better opportunities than the ones available in their native
country
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 in terms of academics.
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, residing in a foreign
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 helps individuals to gain international exposure and
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 helps them develop social and interpersonal skills, which are extremely important for being eligible for lucrative job opportunities
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, there are numerous drawbacks to travelling abroad for
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.
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 of all, from the beginning of applying to a foreign university to staying in the host
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 for the entire duration of your degree, it is an exorbitant affair.
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 a costly endeavour is often unaffordable for the household of many people. That being said, becoming accustomed to the norms and conventions of an
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country
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 can be a tough ordeal for many due to differences in culture and social traditions.
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, I would like to conclude by saying that foreign
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 can be a blessing if it is financially feasible for aspiring students. That being said, the benefits of studying abroad surpass the drawbacks
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunities
  • personal growth
  • development
  • exposure
  • diverse
  • perspectives
  • language skills
  • job prospects
  • adapting
  • environment
  • financial considerations
  • costs
  • homesickness
  • social isolation
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