Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?
Nowadays, many
people
believe that today is the greatest time
in history to be live
because, Correct your spelling
alive
technologies
are getting more sophisticated, and lots of new discoveries has
been done. Change the verb form
have
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, medical science have
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has
achieve
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achieved
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a new
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apply
have
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has
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range Correct article usage
a wide
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of
or
entertainment.
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a good
time
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all the new and old technologies
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games
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are just
call
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calls
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screen
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are born
last
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they
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apply
this
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number
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a number
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also
most no sophisticated technologies
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their
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phone
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phones
other source
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outdoor
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physical and mental health. And My Correct your spelling
their
favorite
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favourite
time
and grandparent
live with their children and tell stories to their grandchildren.
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grandparents
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, is the best Fix the agreement mistake
today
time
to be living because there are many
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much
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has been done, Change to a plural noun
discoveries
and
lots of entertainment are available, and due to medical science Correct word choice
apply
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people's
people
life Add a comma
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expectation
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expectancy
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people
who born
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were born
the
world and Change preposition
of the
experience
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experienced
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. Although
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from
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a very
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