Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?

Nowadays, many
people
believe that today is the greatest
time
in history to be
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because,
technologies
are getting more sophisticated, and lots of new discoveries
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been done.
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, medical science
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achieve
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new
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level in medicines and treatment
,
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and
have
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wide
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range
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of
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or
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entertainment. In my opinion, now is
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time
to live for,
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who's
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age 30 or above, they are
the
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witnesses
changing
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the world and
experience
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then
all the new and old
technologies
.
For example
, they have seen the old black and white tv, more outdoor games, old 8-bit video
game
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games
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like
nitendo
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Nintendo
, and large mobile
phone
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phones
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that
just
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are just
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used for
call
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only.
Furthermore
, they have seen
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OLED
old
oled
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old
tv, pc and mobile game and smartphones with touch
screen
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screens
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. Children, who
born
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in
last
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the last
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10 to 12 years,
they
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have missed
this
transition of
technologies
. In fact, many kids even dose knot know that there was
mobile
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phone just with
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pad only.
Although
, It would be interesting to live in
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, where
also
most no sophisticated
technologies
are available and they still live
there
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life with joy. There was a very basic need at that
time
for
people
to live, they depend on agriculture and there were
on
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apply
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mobile
phone
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phones
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and
other source
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of entertainment and
as a result
, they send and enjoy their
time
with each other. Children
plays
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outdoor
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the outdoor
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game with other kids which benefits
there
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their
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physical and mental health. And My
favorite
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, families are big at a
time
and
grandparent
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grandparents
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live with their children and tell stories to their grandchildren. To conclude,
Todays
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today
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, is the best
time
to be living because there are
many
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discovery
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discoveries
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has been done,
and
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lots of entertainment are available, and due to medical science
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people's
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people
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,people
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life
expectation
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expectancy
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get
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longer. And
people
who
born
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were born
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before 30 years have seen the transition
the
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of the
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world and
experience
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experienced
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all the
technologies
.
Although
,
People
form
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from
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60's have
very
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a very
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simple life and very basic needs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
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