some educationist arguer that non-exam arts-based subject, such as music, drama, art, and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve over all academic performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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as music, drama, art and craft should be the primary

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in the secondary curriculum.

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that they believe in improving academic performance. From my perspective, I disagree because there is no guarantee that all the

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have a

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, the amount of

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there are 14

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for high school, but when you take a test to continue your study in college only 6

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you need to study. In fact, all the

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important,

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, each child has their own

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. The recommendation from the educationist to make art-based

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to be compulsory is wrong,

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will spend more time studying what they don'

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of taking more time learning about their favourite

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, the

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is passionate

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, without

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of

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, there is no opportunity to have a good grade in

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on creativity

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of

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. All the kids have their own

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as science, math, and art.

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force their children to do what they want, whereas each child

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their own dreams. In conclusion, Educationists can force

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to study

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. All the

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recently have learned to

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, none of the

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they like and important for their

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level of education. Each child

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their own

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and dreams, so no one can'

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force them to do what they don'

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like.