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some educationist arguer that non-exam arts-based subject, such as music, drama, art, and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve over all academic performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is argue among educationists that
subjects
,
such
 as music, drama, art and craft should be the primary
subject
 in the secondary curriculum.
This
 is part of the
non-exam
subject
 that they believe in improving academic performance. From my perspective, I disagree because there is no guarantee that all the
students
 have a
passion
 to do
this
non-exam
 arts-based
subject
.
Firstly
, the amount of
subjects
 for the
students
 is too many. In
Indonesia
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,Indonesia
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 there are 14
subjects
 for high school, but when you take a test to continue your study in college only 6
subjects
 you need to study. In fact, all the
subjects
 aren'
t
 important,
moreover
, each child has their own
passion
. The recommendation from the educationist to make art-based
subjects
 to be compulsory is wrong,
for example
,
students
 will spend more time studying what they don'
t
 like
instead
 of taking more time learning about their favourite
subjects
.
Furthermore
, the
non-exam
 arts-based
subject
 is passionate
subjects
,
for instance
, without
full
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 of
passion
, there is no opportunity to have a good grade in
this
subject
.
This
 kind of
subjects
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subject
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depend
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depends
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 on creativity
as a result
 of
passion
. All the kids have their own
passion
,
such
 as science, math, and art.
On the other hand
, even parents can'
t
 force their children to do what they want, whereas each child
have
Change the verb form
has
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 their own dreams. In conclusion, Educationists can force
students
 to study
non-exam
 art-based
subjects
. All the
subjects
 recently have learned to
students
, none of the
subjects
 they like and important for their
next
 level of education. Each child
have
Change the verb form
has
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 their own
passion
 and dreams, so no one can'
t
 force them to do what they don'
t
 like.
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