Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think this is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
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claim that a great income for sports
stars
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is normal and fair because their work requires lots of effort, and a few men can do that. Others,
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, say that they are paid a lot of money for doing ,not an important job, and
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is not justified. I agree with
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point of view and I believe many individuals are industrious like professional athletes, but they don't have enough salary. There are many reasons that some
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argued to prove the high salary for
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is reasonable.
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, Sportspeople work for a short period of time.
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, a football player who plays at an advanced level with a well-paid salary might be in
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position just for 10 years.
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, they do lots of practice for many years without even being sure about reaching to advanced level.
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many
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try to be professional athletes, just a few
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could be successful.
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, Some
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argued that there is no justification between some crucial careers like doctors and sports
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.
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, the work of athletes is not necessary for society, and it's just a hobby.
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, we can never compare medical careers to sports jobs, and
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their contributions to the country.
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, if the issue comes to comparing the income of
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with the other important jobs, there is a great gap
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not very reasonable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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