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The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#exploration #development #alternatives #fuels #priority
We currently rely on fossil
fuels
 to provide the energy that allows our economies to continue to grow and people to thrive.
However
,
this
 essay will argue that safer alternatives to carbon-based energy must be developed. The major reason why we need to find alternative energy sources is
because
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that
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 oil, gas and coal reserves are running out. Experts predict that our supplies of fossil
fuels
 will be exhausted within the
next
 100
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years
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ears
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, potentially causing numerous problems. Transport, electricity production, and manufacturing would all cease to operate, resulting in not only unemployment but
also
 food shortages and even social harm. A hospital cannot save lives unless it has electricity. The longer we wait to develop alternatives, the greater the risk we take in terms of economy and
safely
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. Another reason is that alternative, greener energies are needed in order to reduce the catastrophic environmental damage fossil
fuels
 cause. Extracting and burning coal, oil, and gas causes pollution, habitat destruction, and even species extinction. Petrol-powered cars, as one example, are the major contributors to CO2, a driving force of global warming. If we continue to rely on these
fuels
, the damage to waterways, air, and biodiversity could become irreversible. The sooner we reduce carbon emissions, the more likely we can avert a climate disaster. In conclusion, there is no doubt that our use of fossil
fuels
 puts our entire way of life at risk. If we wish to preserve our planet and the people who live on it, we must make
this
 change soon.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • safe alternatives
  • global priority
  • limitations
  • drawbacks
  • potential benefits
  • government
  • international cooperation
  • investing
  • research and development
  • challenges
  • obstacles
  • transitioning
  • individuals
  • businesses
  • adopting
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