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Topic: Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is important to your brain to get
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 and be yourself
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time
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. A
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 of folks believe that it is necessary to use their free
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 for activities that improve the head. While others think that it is necessary to
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 the soul during free
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.
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 of the
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 during free
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 is more important.
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 of all, the way to have free
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 or
rest
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 is different from person to person. More addition, there are
people
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 who like to have leisure
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 for activities that improve the
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such
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 as reading and doing word puzzles.
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 a
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 of
people
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 who like to go to the gym in their free
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 to exercise to build their body or to go outside with their friends to have fun. For that reason, improving the
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 even the free
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 is a good thing.
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, resting the
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 during their free
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 is necessary for a
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 of
people
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.
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, some
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 like to sleep during their free
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 and not do anything.
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, a
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 of new mothers like to sleep after the infant sleep and get
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. More addition, resting during your free
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 is more important to your health and
mind
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. Even if you like to read books or do anything during your free
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 it is best to
rest
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 or take nap to refresh your
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. To conclude,
people
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 like to get
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 in a different way. Some
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 prefer to do activities during their free
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 . While others like to
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 their
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 during their free
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. In my opinion, in your free ,
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 it is best to take nap to make your
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 fresh.
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Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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