Now a days more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face to face. It is a positive or a negative development.

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days generation
believe
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in keeping associate online rather than one in one.
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, some
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see nothing against
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while others are
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okay
okey
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okay
with that.
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essay will
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discuss
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discus
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both
side
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of
views
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and explain why is disadvantageous. Admittedly, there
has
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been some minor setbacks associated with
people
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choosing social
media
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as means of keeping
friends
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.
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, it's energy, strength and
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time saving
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in visitation. Most businessmen who are usually busy base on the nature of
they
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works
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hardly have
chance
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to see most
persons
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people
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or even make new
friends
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, so
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is the means they can easily meet some important
people
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and socialised via
internet
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.
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, the process of selling and buying today is at
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its peak
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with
facebooks
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Facebook
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, whatapps
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among
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this
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social
media
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friends
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.
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, it brings
people
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of like
mind
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together which will eventually lead to marriage. In
early
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1950's
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,
it's
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very difficult for intercultural marriages but with
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this
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these
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online
thing's
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individuals of
different
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the different
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ethnic
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ethic
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ethnic
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group
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can easily meet , make out
time
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and actualize
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dreams.
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, most black men are married
to
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white ladies of recent.
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, despite the above minor merit, I believed that the demerit relating to
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togetherness on social
media
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are numerous
outweigh
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it
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positive side. It
lead
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to
forcefulness
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development of
love
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. The theologist of
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development
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that attraction is the
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Stage, which will give birth to closeness and understanding before ending up in
love
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.
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, most jobless youths are using
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this opportunities
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of
love
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to fraud so many beautiful ladies of
they
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hard incomes leading to frustration and death has the case maybe.
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, it is
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time consuming
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and expensive. Most of
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this
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so-called
friendship
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friendships
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via social
media
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are
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expensive to keep because of
constant
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the constant
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buying of data to chat and
nearly
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are nearly
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involved
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every
hours
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, in the long run costing so much money.
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founded
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that most
persons
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spend about 10% of
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their
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they
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the
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monthly incomes to buy data and to maintain
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this unreal
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this unreal friend
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friends
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. In conclusion,
although
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so many
people
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prefer choosing to
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online
which
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it
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has minor setbacks. I believe that the negative impact is riskier in terms of fake lovers,
time
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involve and expense far surpasses the advantages .
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relevant Authorities should put policies to
reduced
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this
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effects.
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