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In some countries, few young people go to musical concerts or performances at theatres. Why is this the case?, should young people be encouraged to participate in musicals and other types of performances?

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In certain nations, it has been noted that a small number of adults visit musical shows or
performances
 at the theatre,
this
 is so because of the influence of modern
music
 and idols.
However
,
i
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 think the young
generation
 should be supported to partake in
musics
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music
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 and other various events in order to keep the culture of the country alive.
To begin
 with, the main reason behind the decline in
population
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 of young people going
for
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 musical concerts or
performances
 is the influence of new
music
 on them.
This
 is owing to the fact that the younger
generation
love
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 the genres of songs that are currently released by the new age artist and
also
 the style of beating in which
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 song flows. They
also
 love the noise generated while listening to the playlist, and so feel that the contemporary
music
 is too monotonous and slow for their liking. Another point worth noting is that the youngsters take the recent musicians as their idol because their way of living, dressing and the type of songs
the
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 release appeals to their own way of life. Davido the
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 singer
for instance
 is seen by many teenagers as their role model owing to the fact that his lifestyle is something that they love and his song is a vibe for them.
Hence
performances
 at the theatre
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 seen as
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old fashioned
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 by
the
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young adults and
that
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contemporary artists do not
understanding
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 their body language.
However
, keeping the tradition of the nation
on
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going is the major factor
of
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 motivating the younger
generation
 in contributing to
music
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the music
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 industry and other
performances
.
This
 means most of the musical and theatre
performances
 are cultural displays and
the
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help in connecting the people to what has been set up by their ancestors
and
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as
such
 if they do not participate to take up from where the older
generation
 stopped, the culture of the nation will die out
thus
 leading to lots of mistakes.
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, a report carried by
daily
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 magazine revealed that many youths do
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jot
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 understand the traditions of their land following musical festivals. To reiterate, in as much as modern
music
 and artist has influenced the lifestyle of the young people, the tradition of the country should not be allowed to disappear and so the youths should be encouraged to partake in
music
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 industry and
performances
 of different event.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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