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Last week, you lost your luggage while traveling on holiday. Luckily, you have travel insurance. Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter: Describe the characteristics of what you lost Explain how you lost it Tell the insurance company what you need from them Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing regarding the inconvenience that I suffered
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 travelling. I departed from India to Canada on the 25th of August. Even though, I did apply for insurance for
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 visit. It is because I was carrying some valuable goods
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 as a laptop, mobile phone and some jewellery as well. Among all the items, I could not find my laptop. The device is quite essential to me because all my official meetings and work are being accessed by
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 machine.
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, it is worth 2500 dollars and I recently bought it from the Best Buy store.
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 is the latest version in the market.
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, I even use it during the flight. After completing the work I put it in my handbag. At the point of checkout, my carry bag was misplaced. I even requested the officers to have a look around. They mentioned it might be misplaced in another bag. At
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, I would request you for the claim. As it is the most worthwhile item for me. I hope you will consider
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 and revert me with possible solutions. Yours faithfully. Harpreet Kaur.

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task achievement
Make sure to maintain clarity throughout the letter. For instance, some phrases like 'I did apply for insurance for this visit' could be made clearer and concise.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea without merging them. For instance, separating the point where you describe the laptop from how you lost it could enhance clarity.
coherence cohesion
Your closing is appropriate and formal, which is suitable for this type of letter.
task achievement
The letter maintains a suitable and polite tone throughout, which is appropriate for addressing an insurance company.
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