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Road accidents have become one of the biggest cause of fatalities nowadays. What are the cause of such accidents? How can this problem be dealt with?

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These days, most
of
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the
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people
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 accept that one of the major
causes
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 of death becomes car accidents. There are various
causes
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 of it and we need to try solutions to solve them.
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, one of the
causes
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 of car collisions is improper
traffic
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 system which includes the lack of maintenance of roads,
road
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 maps and directions. If drivers cannot see clearly the signs on the
road
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 especially at
nights
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 and on rainy days, they can have difficulty in their sight which is very dangerous for them. Another reason is due to human beings which is disobedience of
traffic
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 laws and regulations.
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example, driving
car
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a car
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 while
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 is forbidden but
people
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 do not obey and
road
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traffic
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 accidents happen which is risky for
people
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's lives.
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, fewer human resources like
road
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polices
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takes
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 part an important role as they are responsible for the safety of
people
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's lives on
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road
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the road
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 by checking whether the citizens are obeying the laws or not. There are some optimal solutions for these
causes
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. At
first
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, the authorities from
transportation
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the transportation
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 department should do monthly or quarterly monitoring of the
road
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 signs and if there are destructions, they should assign respective
professional
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 to repair them urgently.
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, education sessions about
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 laws should be given broadly around the country and let the public know the importance, advantages and disadvantages of
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law
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 abiding.
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 but not
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least, many authorized persons are needed in strengthening the rules to monitor
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disobedient drivers and give appropriate punishments
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 as charging
fine
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 money, restriction
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driving for a period etc. To summarize, there are
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 for accidents and we
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 can find ways to reduce the mortality of
people
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.
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