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Some people feel that sports is beneficial to the society. Others, however believe that it is nothing but a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #sports #society #leisure #activity
The pie chart illustrates the employment of
anthropologies
 after finishing their undergraduate modules, the table demonstrates the salary information of
anthropologies
 after working 5 years. Generally, we can see that most
anthropologies
 choose to
work
 directly after graduation, meanwhile , the people who
work
 as freelance consultants and government sector earn more than private
companies
 on average. As is shown clearly in the diagram, full-time
work
 takes the predominant place in
anthropologies
 choices, which accounts for 52%, compared to 15% for part-time
work
. The percentage for part-time
work
 plus postgrad study is the lowest among these six categories, with only 5%.
By contrast
, for the full-time postgrad study, the figure represents a considerably larger proportion (8%) than the part-time postgrad study. The data for unemployed and not known are 12% and 8% respectively. When we look at the table, it is apparent that over 80% of
anthropologies
 earn more than $75000 per year in public
companies
, which is 25% higher than private
companies
.
Further
, for the two groups whose salary is less than $75000, the share of people in private
companies
 is about twice that of people who
work
 as freelance consultants or
work
 in a government sector.
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