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The graph represents the proportion of Australian
men
 and
women
 doing physical exercise at other ages in 2010. At
first
 glance, the most percentage in the chart is
men
 aged 15-24 with 52.8%, followed by a significant fall in the percentage of
men
 doing exercises from 52.8% to 39.5% when
men
 became 35-44
age
 group.
However
,
men
 aged 45 and over rose slightly with 43.1%, 45.1%, and 46,7%.
On the other hand
,
women
 who did exercise more when they get older. In the youngest
age
 group, it only has 47.7% in the chart while in the middle ages, it was at its peak with 53.3%.
Besides
 that, it falls tediously at 47.1% in the oldest
age
 group.
Therefore
, the proportion of
men
 doing exercise had the opposite trend with
women
. In general,
men
's proportion of doing physical activities decreased in average
age
 groups while
women
's is the opposite.
This
 is because
women
 maybe focus on their bodies more than
men
.
Submitted by jakelong16091994 on

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